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[Uyen1212]

People's lifestyles have radically changed in recent years, affecting their family ties as a result. This propensity, in my opinion, has both positive and negative effects.Admittedly, changing lifestyles have a variety of good effects on family relationships.First off all, the parents had significant changes in being more open and outgoing with their children, which allowed the children to be closer to the parents and at the same time to bond the relationships of family members.Furthermore, youngsters are independent in choosing their own career path and can freely express their own feelings or opinions.Secondly, technologically improved devices make communication between geographically separated family members more convenient and easy. For instance, many foreign students are often far away from their families, and it is a concern that too much distance may not be able to meet them, but through apps like Facebook they can meet in person easily.The goal is to establish ties and improve mutual understanding.

 

[rubycali]

Money is important in most people’s lives. Although some people think it is more
important than others.
What do you feel are the right uses of money? What other factors are important for a good life?



Present:​

Some people believe that money plays an essential role in lives, even though money is considered even more crucial than others, in some cases. However, it still depends on each person’s point of view. If they appreciate it seriously, they find it important and inverse. Thus, these questions are being discussed below.

Obviously, money is a foundation for humans’ daily lives. Yet, at least, we can pay for basic things such as clothes, food, houses, and service. It is hard to imagine life without money, people will fall into miserable situations, under the pressure of financial problems and rising children. But to some materialistic people, they want to enjoy life, squander money on luxury things such as treasure, sports car, brand stuff,… rather than necessary basic needs, so they found money more crucial than others because they perceive that money can buy everything. But, eventually, money is just a tool, despite having a lot of money we can’t buy the times, love, and happiness of a family. If we overuse money there may have repercussions. For instance, a family that relies solely on money might rapidly disintegrate in the unfortunate situation of the money running out.

Therefore, the value of money is undeniable but we have to be aware of the way to use it reasonably. . Some of the rich expense money to entertain while some people need it to withstand hard lives. In addition, people always want to show off about themselves. Even, they buy clothes that cost a million dollars without regrets. Money should be used for necessary demands, health care system, education. Particularly, authorities should support children who go into disadvantaged situations have opportunities to go to school or improve medical facilities for hospitals in the case of an epidemic outbreak. Charity funds are also encouraged a good utilization of money. Moreover, people should live a good modest life, learn how to save money, and use it in the right ways.

Overall, money is vital for human lives. But it is not everything, people shouldn’t focus too much on it. We need to treasure life because there are so many meaningful things in the world not just about money.

 

[_.ngpanh0705._]

When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree?​

[250 - 300 words]

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It's surely true that a great many people choose compensation once they find a cycle. A high-benefit society guarantees an unreasonable trend of presence, wherein the people can have the assets for their developing call for fundamental human cravings and things. Yet, it's far from a counterfeit that profit is the most basic consideration while choosing a profession. I differ because of the reality that I, in all actuality, do accept that there are various factors additionally influencing this choice. There is a repercussion for many reasons.

Most importantly, private connections and the climate in a position of work are incredibly vital while choosing an undertaking. For instance, having an extraordinary administrator or charming partner could have a monstrous effect on specialists' scopes of bliss and trendy top of the line of life. Representatives are people, too, and they seek artistic creations and ways of life balance in the same way that everyone else does. A movement could likewise pay a galactic compensation, but assuming that the functioning circumstances are pitiable, it's far more senseless to take it. As far as I'm concerned, opting for a job that pays a little less but provides pleasant working conditions is a much better option. Besides, people create artistic creations to acquire insight. Numerous understudies' artworks to their advantage, and currently not to make money. Some understudies do part-time occupations while researching. That turned out to be exceptionally valuable since something I was dominating in college transformed into the equivalent part I was rehearsing for my interaction. That changed into a reasonable encounter that took on extra significance at that level than cash.

Eventually, I agree that compensation isn't the most imperative perspective while settling on a task. I also demand various kinds of thought be essential in addition.
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[Nsjjs]

3 on the one hand/ intelligent machines/ have/ many benefits.

4 the use of robots/ can replace/ human workforce/ reduce/ the cost of production

5 a robot/ can/ replace/ many workers/ assembly lines/ such as/ packing/ lifting heavy things

6 in addition/ robots/ can/ not only/ complete tasks faster/ more precisely/ but also/ make fewer errors/ defects

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7 on the other hand/ disadvantages/ use/ A.I robots/ obvious

8 first/ when/ attacked/ malware or viruses/ disabled/ power failure/ robots/ may lead/ misuse/ destruction/ the world

9 second/ there/ sometimes/ malfunctions/ due to/ computer system crashes/ hackers/ take control/ computers/ cause damage/ robots

Conclusion

10 in conclusion/ robots/ can substitute/ humans/ stressful/ dangerous work/ and/ advantages/ outweigh/ disadvantages

 

[Nsjjs]

Ai viết lại giùm e vs ạ

 

[bap2209]

Write a report to your class teacher on the process of preparing a group presentation that you and your friends went through.

 

[vyvy1234]

Some people believe that developments in the field of artificial intelligence will have a positive impact on our lives in the near future. Others, by contrast, are worried that we are not prepared for a world in which computers are more intelligent than humans.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There is a debate whether artificial intelligence technology benefits us or poses a great threat to people because of its intelligence. In my opinion, the applications of AI techniques can offer us a new world with more convenience only when it is controlled by humans.
The widespread use of AI technology facilitates boosting global efficiency in education. Thanks to a good deal of accessible learning software using AI, people today have great advantages in improving their self-regulation. For example, the app Elsa Speak applies AI systems to create a suitable course for each learner after a level test. Not only that, it also can emphasize the weakness of students and give learners guidance to correct their mistakes via the app's proprietary voice recognition technology. As a result, such apps enable students to be self-taught irrespective of their location or schedule.
However, it can be considered as a concerning problem related to human existence if human intelligence is left far behind by AI intelligence. This is probably because in that case, AI is more likely to perform well than people and replace us in all aspects of life, such as studying, working, or solving problems. Not only are workers made redundant, but also humans become more lazy and useless than ever. Day by day, it can contribute to the lack of humans’ authority and control because of all decisions made by AI.
In conclusion, although the development of AI technology provides us with more beneficial tools to encourage global productivity, we always have to be cautious when applying them in real life in order to avoid AI taking control over humanity.

 

[Vũ.Linh]

research shows that business meetings, discussions, and training are happening online nowadays. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

It's true that with the development of information technology, online video conferencing programs in business are used widely nowadays. Although doing this has several advantages, the drawbacks may be more significant.

On the one hand, there can be some minor benefits of online business meetings or webinars. One possible advantage is that enterprises can easily stay in contact with their partners, employees, and customers in every location and situation. Another beneficial effect could be that businesses can reduce travel expenses so they can save more money to invest in other fields. By that, they can earn more profit for their employees. It's not always the case that travel fees are enough to invest in others, with giant corporations, that type of fee is just like money for meals.

The fact that using the internet to meet, discuss, and train new members instead of face-to-face interaction can have major downsides which overshadow these positive impacts. The most obvious issue could be that web conferencing requires a reliable and frequent internet connection, if not, the meetings or training would be disrupted communication and misunderstandings. It's easy to see in Vietnam, that some companies and factories had to work online because of Covid-19, some C.E.Os said that it's really hard for them to keep in touch, and understand their partner, and it also reduced their productivity. Besides that, It's such an expensive fee for small businesses to set up and maintain a high-quality conference system when it has technical problems.

In conclusion, despite the potential benefits of widespread use of web conferencing, they pale in comparison to the drawbacks involved.

m.n đánh giá dùm em với ạ :< em cảm ơn

 

[AnhAnh67]

Topic : Nowadays, some employers think that formal academic qualifications are more important than life experience or personal qualities when they look for new employees. Why is it the case ? Is it a positive or negative development ?



In today’s society, it can not be denied that professional degree take an important role when you apply for a job. However, some recruiters use the qualifications as the main measurement over those who have good life experience or good personal qualities. And viewed from different sides, this trend has both positive and negative development.



As far as I know, learning has been important for many ages and especially in the new milenium of technology. And franky speaking that is one of the main factors why recriters choose the employees that well-qualified over those who have good life experience and personality traits. The formal education is a structured, systematic form of learning and the professional degree can be an evidence for knowledgeable candidates, illustrates their patience, classic skills and tough training.



Overall, besides the benefits of this trend, there are many drawbacks why the employers shouldn’t use the high qualifications as the main measurement when they choose new staffs. It was not the accident that many graduated students are jobleness and furthermore they will become burdens to the society. What is mentioning is there are many students are shortage of communication skills and life experience. They just know the theories and have good qualifications for that. To be honest, it is a bad consequence and have to be changed in the society.

Mn đánh giá và nếu sai sót thì góp ý giúp em với ạ, mới vào học nên ko biết nhiều lắm

 

[thangvudk123]

It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to the remote natural environment, such as the South Pole. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Task2

Traveling to the away areas is no longer an impossible task for scientists and individuals. Although its potential drawbacks are noticeable, i still supposed that its benefits possibly brought are more significant.

There are several disadvantages to be considered. The most evident is that it is possible to have some conflict with the indigenous. Visitors and the local residents get a language barrier, in addition, they have the tendency to protect their domain. The misunderstanding of people would cause some unintentional injury to each other. We need to take into account that developing of tourism there would pose a threat to the natural environment. the development would require the large space, So some habitats of local species could be destroyed. As a result, a lot of creature could be endangered, this affected negatively to eco systems of the areas.

Albeit some drawbacks, i still put more emphasis on the advantages of the projects. Most importantly, traveling provides the local people a chance to access the modern world. Visitors come to the region and bring with them a lot of knowledge and technology. The indigenous would be learned the ways to cultivate and feed animals, which helps provide them with a higher life condition. My opinion could be strengthened with the argument that there are a lot of mystic things of the world possibly related to these remote regions. Because people can see exotic creatures and historical relics, scientists also have a chance to do research in these areas. The potents of these researches are unpredictable, this potentially contributes to the science world.

In conclusion, there are some certain drawbacks related to conflict and impacts on the nature. I still consider that it is more beneficial because its potential contribution to science and this a good chance for local people to approach closely to our civilization.

Ai có kinh nghiệm chấm bài chấm giúp mình bài này được không ạ (bài này mình tự viết rất lâu rồi và mình hiện tại có nhu cầu chấm lại )? Mình đang học cách chấm nên để xem có thể ra cùng một band điểm không? (ghi rõ từng mục ạ ) cảm ơn mn nhiều

 

[mhanggggggg]

Money is important in most people’s lives. Although some people think it is more
important than others.
What do you feel are the right uses of money? What other factors are important for a good life?



Present:​

Some people believe that money plays an essential role in lives, even though money is considered even more crucial than others, in some cases. However, it still depends on each person’s point of view. If they appreciate it seriously, they find it important and inverse. Thus, these questions are being discussed below.

Obviously, money is a foundation for humans’ daily lives. Yet, at least, we can pay for basic things such as clothes, food, houses, and service. It is hard to imagine life without money, people will fall into miserable situations, under the pressure of financial problems and rising children. But to some materialistic people, they want to enjoy life, squander money on luxury things such as treasure, sports car, brand stuff,… rather than necessary basic needs, so they found money more crucial than others because they perceive that money can buy everything. But, eventually, money is just a tool, despite having a lot of money we can’t buy the times, love, and happiness of a family. If we overuse money there may have repercussions. For instance, a family that relies solely on money might rapidly disintegrate in the unfortunate situation of the money running out.

Therefore, the value of money is undeniable but we have to be aware of the way to use it reasonably. . Some of the rich expense money to entertain while some people need it to withstand hard lives. In addition, people always want to show off about themselves. Even, they buy clothes that cost a million dollars without regrets. Money should be used for necessary demands, health care system, education. Particularly, authorities should support children who go into disadvantaged situations have opportunities to go to school or improve medical facilities for hospitals in the case of an epidemic outbreak. Charity funds are also encouraged a good utilization of money. Moreover, people should live a good modest life, learn how to save money, and use it in the right ways.

Overall, money is vital for human lives. But it is not everything, people shouldn’t focus too much on it. We need to treasure life because there are so many meaningful things in the world not just about money.

 

[thao0509]

Ai có kinh nghiệm chấm bài chấm giúp mình bài này được không ạ ? Mình cần biết khả năng của chính mình đến đâu nên để xem có thể ra cùng một band điểm và sửa sao cho nói hay ( tầm band 6 trở lên) cảm ơn mn nhiều

It is neither possible nor useful to provide university places for a high proportion of
young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Most people think that it is not possible or useful to dispense university education services on such a large scale. I strongly disagree with this idea and will give my own opinion about the advantage of creating more and more places for children to have access to university education.


On the one hand, it is impossible for poor students to afford their tuition fees. Because most high-quality universities which plenty of pupils choose to study here, require exorbitant education costs. For example, the most expensive schools are VinUni with tuition of VND406 million per semester, followed by Fulbright Vietnam VND234 million, and RMIT Vietnam VND160.6 million. As a result, it is impossible to provide almost all young people with access to tertiary education. Moreover, having a university degree no longer has a vital role in the future of young people. The reason is that finishing college is no longer a guarantee of impressing employers. For instance, many billionaire entrepreneurs, such as Mark Zuckerberg and Bill Gates, who decided not to graduate from college, their names have become synonymous with success.


On the other hand, I firmly believe that formal qualifications gained from a prestigious university can enhance students’ career prospects. When we have some formal qualifications, our resume will open the door to applying to big companies such as Vietnam Airlines, Vietinbank, and Samsung Electronics. Besides that during their time at university, students should develop practical skills to enhance their career prospects in the future. It is unfortunate that tertiary education does not provide students with hands-on experience which is important when they start looking for employment. To illustrate, when it comes to recruitment, interpersonal and teamwork skills are often cited as essential skills that employers look for in a candidate. As a consequence, students are likely to find a good job that has a direct relationship with their practical skills.

In conclusion, I still believe that the government has allocated a large amount of budget for university education in order to transform the traditional learning models, contributing to the development of high-quality labor.