One of my hobbies is painting which is an elegant pastime. I like painting in my free time. It is my best favorite??? because it helps me relax after hard working days. Every time drawing , I feel comfortable and energetic . The more energetic I am, the more efficiently I work. A number of ways (???) saves the great moments is painting. I like painting many things that I see them (đã có that thay thể cho "them") such as beautiful mountains, smooth rivers , friendly peoples and so on. When I see my pictures , I love my life more and I get on well with people. Since I was young , I have alway admired Leonado da Vinci so I want to become an artist . I believe that If I try my best I will achieve my goal in the future.
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Mình cũng chẳng hiểu tại sao"A number of ways is painting"??? Và "save the great moment" phải là "that saves the great moments" hoặc "saving the great moments"...
Bài viết vẫn chưa rõ ràng các ý. Bài viết về hobby và kết bài thì hướng sang dream job. ~
Câu kết bài, rất dễ viết, đó là viết lại câu mở bài - theo 1 cách khác.
VD: One of my hobbies is painting which is an elegant pastime.
Kết: All in all, I really love painting in my spare time (and I wish to become a painter in the future)