Ai giỏi ngữ pháp tiếng anh sửa hộ tớ bài này với:( thanks nhìu

marigold

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đây là topic nói của tớ
My mother is forty five years old. she is a teacher. she looks like my grandmother with a high nose, oval face anh white skin. the difference is that my mother was thin, very thin while my grandmother is overweight. I think that's the only difference between the two people. my mother wears very simple. she likes black so she always wears black. she usually wears dark suit for work and she looks very polite. my mother made curly hair last week. i don't like it because i like her straight hair. In general my mother is a great mother. she always give me smiles. I love my mother so much :KSV@16:
 
she looks like --> She's like : giống như
the difference is that my mother was thin, very thin while my grandmother is overweight --> The diffrence is my mother is thin, very thin but my grandnother is overweight. Dùng but hay hơn
While thường dùng chỉ trong cấu trúc câu hành động khác diễn ra thì hành động khác xen vào :KSV@08:
I think that's the only difference between the two people --> between them
Theo tớ là vậy!!!
 
Sorry bạn nha nhưng mình thấy cách viết văn của bạn ko hay..còn vụng lắm..nên chau chuốt chút
Vd nha :
she looks like my grandmother with a high nose, oval face anh white skin. the difference is that my mother was thin, very thin while my grandmother is overweight. I think that's the only difference between the two people
She takes after ( Take after : giống ) my grandmother with a high bridge nose ( sống mũi ) , oval face and bright skin ( thay vì white skin : vì da người châu á ko phải là trắng nên dùng bright sẽ tốt hơn ) . The little difference from my mother and my grandmother is my mother is very skinny and my grandmother is fatter , As you know , the time ruins my grandmother figure ( khác biệt nhỏ giữa họ là mẹ tôi thì nhỏ con còn bà tôi thì mập hơn ..ko nên dùng overweight nó là lời văn nặng nề hơn , difference thì nên dùng giới từ from )
my mother made curly hair last week : bạn có thể dùng như sau :
my mother was curly her hair last week
hoặc : my mother made her hair curly last week
she always give me smiles : bạn nên dùng ; she always smiles with me ..(i love her smiles...it's so beautifful...: bạn nên chêm vô những câu cảm xúc vào phần tả..làm bài văn mượt hơn )
Hi vọng bạn làm tốt topic của mình ^^
 
Thay vì là "forty five" thì nên là "forty-five" và "the difference is that my mother was thin, very thin while my grandmother is overweight" thì câu của bạn chưa thông nhất về tenses còn lại ngữ pháp của bạn ko có gì sai hết chỉ là cách viết chưa mượt mà như Grace nói. Do vậy mình có một số lời khuyên cho bạn:

1/"My mother is forty five years old. she is a teacher." thay vì hai câu ngắn bạn nên chuyển nó thành 1 câu dài " My mother is forty-five years old, a teacher at abc (trường mà mẹ bạn dạy) " làm vậy câu văn của bạn sẽ hay hơn mà con cho người đọc biết thêm về mẹ bạn.

2/"she looks like my grandmother with a high nose, oval face anh white skin. the difference is that my mother was thin, very thin while my grandmother is overweight. I think that's the only difference between the two people." ba câu này mình nghĩ bạn nên thêm các từ nối làm cho câu mạch lạc hơn và cũng như câu trên bạn nên kết hợp các câu ngắn thành một câu dài " My mom and my grandmother look really like each other with the same high bridge nose, oval face,and bright skin. However, there is still a little difference between them which is my mother is very slim whereas my grandmother is a bit fatter."

3/ "my mother wears very simple. she likes black so she always wears black. she usually wears dark suit for work and she looks very polite." ba câu này bạn viết chưa được hợp lý lắm "she likes black so she always wears black. she usually wears dark suit for work and she looks very polite." bạn vừa nói "always" rồi lại "usually" theo mình bạn nên kết hợp hai câu này lại "Her favorite color is black, therefore, she usually wears dark suit for work and she looks very polite" và bạn nên bỏ câu "my mother wears very simple." vì hai câu sau và câu này ko hề hỗ trợ lẫn nhau (hoặc bạn có thể thêm luận cứ để tả thêm về mẹ bạn ăn mặt đơn giản ra sao và làm bài văn hay hơn)

Đó là ý kiến của mình, hy vọng bạn sẽ gặp nhiều may mắn với topic của mình.
 
những cái khác thì mấy ac kia sửa hết r, e chi bor sung thêm, ko biết có đúng hay ko.
my mother wears very simple->simply
In general my mother is a great mother-> e nghĩ woman sẽ hay hơn
 
My mother is forty five years old. she is a teacher. she looks like my grandmother with a high nose, oval face anh white skin. the difference is that my mother was thin, very thin while my grandmother is overweight. I think that's the only difference between the two people. my mother wears very simple. she likes black so she always wears black. she usually wears dark suit for work and she looks very polite. my mother made curly hair last week. i don't like it because i like her straight hair. In general my mother is a great mother. she always give me smiles. I love my mother so much
My mother, who is forty five-years old is a teacher. She has a high nose with oval face and white skin just like my grandmother. But the biggest difference between my mom and my grandmother is my mom very thin while my grandmother is overweight! I think that's the feature to recognize them.
My mother is fond of back, that's why she always wears black clothes. At work, she look very polite in dark suit. Last week, my mother made curly hair. I really don't like the new hair. I perfer straight hair to curly hair!
She always smiles with me (and cheers me up whenever i feel sad). I love my mother, so much!

ý em là zậy thoy chứ ngữ pháp em còn luộm thuộm lắm. bài này ý thì đc nhưng mà hơi thiếu biểu cảm 1 tí. cố lên nhá ;))

 
you shouldn't use " in general" in sentence "In general my mother is a great mother", maybe it is not suitable. you can use " with me". your writting is rather simple, you write about your mother, so you should express your feelings.
 
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